NAASHTI BOOK PART 1, TRANSLATION APPOUVED

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Geography

Naashti people aren’t understandable the world in terms of territory and borders: they build citadels around study points and draw roads ranging from a citadel to an other. Each citadel is lead by two Eth –Kath.
Since lunar extinction, the citadels are fully independent and rest on no external resources. The tunnels are underground pipe, wide enough, in which the Naashti pass thanks to wide artefact. Their good functioning is due to a thin canal of Water-Ligntning, which relay their energy and which is regularly recycle.

SIMH-ETH : Sanctuary Citadels.

These are the citadels which are never left, even at the heart of the lunar extinction, Al-Elp and Ay-Hin. From now on, they are considering like the cradle of Nasshti Civilization and severely guard. Rare are the members of the other people authorized to approach.

Al-Eph (first place) is located in the depth of the Storms Archipelago at the middle of The Dreams Ocean. It had built around the original fire well, the fire mouth that Nassh in person had so much study. First Nasshti citadel, it is also one the most take away and the most guard since forever. This two last point’s permit to survive at the lunar extinction, and serve as refuge at the majority of survivors.
Bey-Saa’sn, the citadel E’Du-Egir, head with a great wisdom the study of the fire well and the Water-lightning, arouse admiration and some jealousy in the others citadels.

Ay-Hin (distant fire well) is at the opposite of the previous: in the depth of a lost island in the Opal Coast offshore which contains impressive Ardent veins. Since the exile, this citadel specialise in the alchemical research and it’s which is originally of the antidote of the Cold Death. His residents are them who wish the most ardently the Naashti come back on the public stage and the revenge on the Pasty Moon.
Gash-Dahl’z, his E’Dhu-Egir, have at his disposal, Ublak, a tiny artefact sensitive to eradicate the Empire of the Jade Triad, if it is release one day.

The Darh-Eth: recolonized Citadels
These citadels had left during the lunar extinction, but the Naashti are come back and put back in function. Their functionality is more or less advanced, according to the progress which are done ant the problems met during their reactivation.

Chim-Eth (the vegetable citadel) had located under the Morning Mountains, right in the heart of the massif and enough close of Kastel Kaisealta, rather than the recolonized citadel, but his winning back is perpetually compromise by the progression of the roots of the Beathacrann.

Mem-Eth (Cold Citadel) had built at proximity of the Khaliman Republic troglodyte city leaded by the Ermadhi Lineage. During her recolonization, the Naashtis are seen the Ermadhi discover the citadel and had begun to explore. The citadel was cloisonned in two, in order to let at the Ermadhi, ruins to explore during the rest had secretly put back in function.

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Geography
The Naashti people don't understand the world in terms of territory and borders: they build citadels around study points and draw roads ranging from one citadel to another. Each citadel is lead by two Eth-Kath.
Since the lunar extinction, the citadels are fully independent and rely on no external resources. Their tunnels are wide underground pipes in which the Naashti pass thanks to their artifacts. These function due to a thin canal of Water-Lightning, which relays their energy and is regularly recycled.

SIMH-ETH : Sanctuary Citadels.
These are the citadels which were not left, even at the heart of the lunar extinction, Al-Elp and Ay-Hin. They are considered the cradle of Naashti Civilization and fanatically guarded. Rare are the members of other peoples authorized to approach.

Al-Eph (first place) is located in the depths of the Storms Archipelago in the middle of The Dreams Ocean. It is built around the original fire well, the fire mouth that Naash in person studied. First Nasshti citadel, it is also one of the most out of the way and guarded. These last two points allowed it to survive the lunar extinction and serve as a refuge for the majority of survivors.
Bey-Saa'sn, the citadel E’Du-Egir, heads with great wisdom the study of the fire well and the Water-lightning, gaining admiration and some jealousy in the others citadels.

Ay-Hin (distant fire well) is directly opposite the previous one: in the depth of a lost island in the Opal Coast, offshore are impressive Ardent veins. Since the exile, this citadel specializes in alchemical research and is where the antidote to the Cold Death was discovered. Its residents are those who wish most ardently for the Naashti to return to the public stage and revenge on the Pasty Moon.

Gash-Dahl’z, the E’Dhu-Egir, has at his disposal Ublak, a tiny artifact designed to eradicate the Empire of the Jade Triad, if is is one day released.

The Darh-Eth: recolonized Citadels
These citadels were abandoned during the lunar extinction, but the Naashti have returned and put back into operation. Progress has been made and problems dealt with during their reactivation. Their functionality is more or less restored.

Chim-Eth (the vegetable citadel) is located under the Morning Mountains, right in the heart of the massif and close to Kastel Kaisealta. The recolonized citadel is perpetually compromised by the progression of the roots of the Beathacrann.

Mem-Eth (Cold Citadel) is built in proximity to the Khaliman Republic troglodyte city headed by the Ermadhi Lineage. During it's recolonization, the Ermadhi discovered the citadel and had begun to explore it. The Naasthi split the citadel in two, in order to let the Ermadhi explore the ruins while secretly resorting the rest.

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Geography
The Naashti people don't understand the world in terms of territory and borders: they build citadels around study points and draw roads ranging from one citadel to another. Each citadel is lead by two Eth-Kath.
Since the lunar extinction, the citadels are fully independent and rely on no external resources. Their tunnels are wide underground pipes in which the Naashti pass thanks to their artifacts. These function due to a thin canal of Water-Lightning, which relays their energy and is regularly recycled.

SIMH-ETH : Sanctuary Citadels.
These are the citadels which were not left, even at the heart of the lunar extinction, Al-Elp and Ay-Hin. They are considered the cradle of Naashti Civilization and fanatically guarded. Rare are the members of other peoples authorized to approach.

Al-Eph (first place) is located in the depths of the Storms Archipelago in the middle of The Dreams Ocean. It is built around the original fire well, the fire mouth that Naash in person studied. First Nasshti citadel, it is also one of the most out of the way and guarded. These last two points allowed it to survive the lunar extinction and serve as a refuge for the majority of survivors.
Bey-Saa'sn, the citadel E’Du-Egir, heads with great wisdom the study of the fire well and the Water-lightning, gaining admiration and some jealousy in the others citadels.

Ay-Hin (distant fire well) is directly opposite the previous one: in the depth of a lost island in the Opal Coast, offshore are impressive Ardent veins. Since the exile, this citadel specializes in alchemical research and is where the antidote to the Cold Death was discovered. Its residents are those who wish most ardently for the Naashti to return to the public stage and revenge on the Pasty Moon.

Gash-Dahl’z, the E’Dhu-Egir, has at his disposal Ublak, a tiny artifact designed to eradicate the Empire of the Jade Triad, if is is one day released.

The Darh-Eth: recolonized Citadels
These citadels were abandoned during the lunar extinction, but the Naashti have returned and put back into operation. Progress has been made and problems dealt with during their reactivation. Their functionality is more or less restored.

Chim-Eth (the vegetable citadel) is located under the Morning Mountains, right in the heart of the massif and close to Kastel Kaisealta. The recolonized citadel is perpetually compromised by the progression of the roots of the Beathacrann.

Mem-Eth (Cold Citadel) is built in proximity to the Khaliman Republic troglodyte city headed by the Ermadhi Lineage. During it's recolonization, the Ermadhi discovered the citadel and had begun to explore it. The Naasthi split the citadel in two, in order to let the Ermadhi explore the ruins while secretly resorting the rest.