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Message  el_ludo le Mar 7 Fév 2017 - 12:55

If anyone can readback, this first part ?

Chronology

Mythic age of creation

[Elle] build Mornea, then, after the three first Architects, [Orhöm], this one who want to know and follow the wind. [Orhöm the silvery] bring to Mornea the nocturnal rest and the pale light of [Hannah].
After his curse, [Orhöm] leave the others architects to travel Mornea, created the men and ordered them to go where the wind carry them.

Peace Age
Come for the East to find the place where [thebus] gone, few families settled on an desert Archipelago of the Dreams Ocean.

[Concorde] Age
Cycle 1097 _ Kastel Kanam is under the flames and 843 residents of the west barony were exiled overseas
Cycle 1100 _ Leaded par [Irma) the Templar, the 487 ban survivors sailed into the West.
Cycle 1129 _ [Irma] vanishing
Cycle 1268 _ the storm force [ the Utopians] to flee the Archipelago
Cycle 1269 _ Arrvial on the great island
Cycle 1294 _ building of the first flotilla
Cycle 1302 _ discovery of the well and exploration of the first cavities
Cycle 1353 _ Forteza explosion
Cycle 1350 – 1365 _ Increase trading on Mornea Coast
Cycle 1367-1368 _ Return preparation, intense ship construction
Cycle 1369 _ Return Expedition, permanent settlement on Nacer Engolimo
Cycle 1370 _ Naashti show up at [the Utopians] in Forteza
Cycle 1372 _ Cheikhs learn UTOPIA existence and reveal this information at all Mornea


Presentation
UTOPIA is more a concept of society than a real geography space. If we ask them where they live, the [UTOPIANS] will give the vessel name, if we insist a little more, they will speak of their [ Balsao]. Nevertheless, if they must define the space where they live, whomever they belong; the [UTOPIANS] indicate the [Dreams Ocean], as well as the live by and for the sea.
Moreover, they angle their maritime maps around the Ocean, Mornea continent while being the lower end and the Oceanic gap, the upper egde. The great South-North current, which travel the ocean, is always at the center.
Thus are defined the tree mains directions of the [UTOPIAN] map, the [Molhe] where come the current (the South of the Empire of the Jade triad map), the [Arrepio] where it proceed to the North and the [Nascer] at the opposite of the gap (the east)
However, today the Cheikhs understood the [Utopians] existence and reveal to the Mornea Leaders, this one must be located as a people in the diplomatic relationship game.


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Message  mallachain le Mer 22 Fév 2017 - 22:28

Here are some suggestions in red.
Text I don't understand is in green

el_ludo a écrit:If anyone can readback, this first part ?

Chronology

Mythic age of creation

[Elle] builds Mornea, then, after the three first Architects, [Orhöm], this one who wants to know and follow the wind. [Orhöm the silvery] brings to Mornea the nocturnal rest and the pale light of [Hannah].
After his curse, [Orhöm] leaves the others architects to travel Mornea, creates the men and orders them to go where the winds carry them.

Age of Peace
Come to the East to find the place where [thebus] has gone. Few families settle on a desert Archipelago of the Dreams Ocean.

[Concorde] Age
Cycle 1097 _ Kastel Kanam burns and 843 residents of the west barony are exiled overseas
Cycle 1100 _ Lead by [Irma) the Templar, 487 survivors sail into the West.
Cycle 1129 _ [Irma] vanishes
Cycle 1268 _ The storm force [ the Utopians] to flee the Archipelago
Cycle 1269 _ Arrvial on the great island
Cycle 1294 _ Building of the first flotilla
Cycle 1302 _ Discovery of the well and exploration of the first caves
Cycle 1353 _ Forteza explosion
Cycle 1350 – 1365 _ Increase trading on Mornea Coast
Cycle 1367-1368 _ Preparation for the Return, intense ship construction
Cycle 1369 _ Return Expedition, permanent settlement on Nacer Engolimo
Cycle 1370 _ Naashti arrive show up at [the Utopians] in Forteza
Cycle 1372 _ Sheikhs learn of UTOPIA existence and reveal this information to all of Mornea


Presentation
UTOPIA is more a concept of society than a real geographical space. If we ask them where they live, the [UTOPIANS] will give the vessel name, if we insist a little more, they will speak of their [ Balsao]. Nevertheless, if they must define the space where they live, who they serve; the [UTOPIANS] indicate the [Dreams Ocean], and they live by and for the sea.
Moreover, they angle their maritime maps around the Ocean, Mornea continent while being the lower end and the Oceanic gap, the upper egde. The great South-North current, which travel the ocean, is always at the center.
Thus are defined the three mains directions of the [UTOPIAN] map, the [Molhe] where the current originates (the south of the Empire of the Jade triad map), the [Arrepio] where it proceeds to the North and the [Nascer] at the opposite of the gap (the east).
However, today the Sheikhs discover the [Utopians] existence and reveal them to the Mornea's Leaders, this one must be located as a people in the diplomatic relationship game.

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Message  el_ludo le Ven 24 Fév 2017 - 16:08

mallachain a écrit:Here are some suggestions in red.
Text I don't understand is in green

el_ludo a écrit:If anyone can readback, this first part ?

Chronology

Mythic age of creation

[Elle] builds Mornea, then, after the three first Architects, [Orhöm], this one who wants to know and follow the wind. [Orhöm the silvery] brings to Mornea the nocturnal rest and the pale light of [Hannah].
After his curse, [Orhöm] leaves the others architects to travel Mornea, creates the men and orders them to go where the winds carry them.

Age of Peace
Come to the East to find the place where [thebus] has gone. Few families settle on a desert Archipelago of the Dreams Ocean.

[Concorde] Age
Cycle 1097 _ Kastel Kanam burns and 843 residents of the west barony are exiled overseas
Cycle 1100 _ Lead by [Irma) the Templar, 487 survivors sail into the West.
Cycle 1129 _ [Irma] vanishes
Cycle 1268 _ The storm force [ the Utopians] to flee the Archipelago
Cycle 1269 _ Arrvial on the great island
Cycle 1294 _ Building of the first flotilla
Cycle 1302 _ Discovery of the well and exploration of the first caves
Cycle 1353 _ Forteza explosion
Cycle 1350 – 1365 _ Increase trading on Mornea Coast
Cycle 1367-1368 _ Preparation for the Return, intense ship construction
Cycle 1369 _ Return Expedition, permanent settlement on Nacer Engolimo
Cycle 1370 _ Naashti arrive show up at [the Utopians] in Forteza
Cycle 1372 _ Sheikhs learn of UTOPIA existence and reveal this information to all of Mornea


Presentation
UTOPIA is more a concept of society than a real geographical space. If we ask them where they live, the [UTOPIANS] will give the vessel name, if we insist a little more, they will speak of their [ Balsao]. Nevertheless, if they must define the space where they live, who they serve; the [UTOPIANS] indicate the [Dreams Ocean], and they live by and for the sea.
Moreover, they angle draw their maritime maps around the Ocean, Mornea continent while being the lower end and the Oceanic gap, the upper egde. The great South-North current, which travel the ocean, is always at the center.
Thus are defined the three mains directions of the [UTOPIAN] map, the [Molhe] where the current originates (the south of the Empire of the Jade triad map), the [Arrepio] where it proceeds to the North and the [Nascer] at the opposite of the gap (the east).
However, today the Sheikhs discover the [Utopians] existence and reveal them to the Mornea's Leaders, this onethe utopians must be situated must be located as a people in the diplomatic relationship game.


Thanks for the suggestion, it's more understable with the suggestions in blue ?

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Message  mallachain le Mer 1 Mar 2017 - 19:02

el_ludo a écrit:
mallachain a écrit:Here are some suggestions in red.
Text I don't understand is in green

el_ludo a écrit:If anyone can readback, this first part ?

Chronology

Mythic age of creation

[Elle] builds Mornea, then, after the three first Architects, [Orhöm], this one who wants to know and follow the wind. [Orhöm the silvery] brings to Mornea the nocturnal rest and the pale light of [Hannah].
After his curse, [Orhöm] leaves the others architects to travel Mornea, creates the men and orders them to go where the winds carry them.

Age of Peace
Come to the East to find the place where [thebus] has gone. Few families settle on a desert Archipelago of the Dreams Ocean.

[Concorde] Age
Cycle 1097 _ Kastel Kanam burns and 843 residents of the west barony are exiled overseas
Cycle 1100 _ Lead by [Irma) the Templar, 487 survivors sail into the West.
Cycle 1129 _ [Irma] vanishes
Cycle 1268 _ The storm force [ the Utopians] to flee the Archipelago
Cycle 1269 _ Arrvial on the great island
Cycle 1294 _ Building of the first flotilla
Cycle 1302 _ Discovery of the well and exploration of the first caves
Cycle 1353 _ Forteza explosion
Cycle 1350 – 1365 _ Increase trading on Mornea Coast
Cycle 1367-1368 _ Preparation for the Return, intense ship construction
Cycle 1369 _ Return Expedition, permanent settlement on Nacer Engolimo
Cycle 1370 _ Naashti arrive show up at [the Utopians] in Forteza
Cycle 1372 _ Sheikhs learn of UTOPIA existence and reveal this information to all of Mornea


Presentation
UTOPIA is more a concept of society than a real geographical space. If we ask them where they live, the [UTOPIANS] will give the vessel name, if we insist a little more, they will speak of their [ Balsao]. Nevertheless, if they must define the space where they live, who they serve; the [UTOPIANS] indicate the [Dreams Ocean], and they live by and for the sea.
Moreover, they angle draw their maritime maps around the Ocean, Mornea continent while being the lower end and the Oceanic gap, the upper egde. The great South-North current, which travel the ocean, is always at the center.
Thus are defined the three mains directions of the [UTOPIAN] map, the [Molhe] where the current originates (the south of the Empire of the Jade triad map), the [Arrepio] where it proceeds to the North and the [Nascer] at the opposite of the gap (the east).
However, today the Sheikhs discover the [Utopians] existence and reveal them to the Mornea's Leaders, this onethe utopians must be situated must be located as a people in the diplomatic relationship game.


Thanks for the suggestion, it's more understable with the suggestions in blue ?
How about:

They draw their maritime maps of the Ocean with the Mornea continent being the lower end and the Oceanic gap at the upper edge. The great South-North current, which travels the ocean, is always at the center.


However, today the Sheikhs discover the [Utopians] existence and reveal them to Mornea's Leaders. The Utopians are now a force in the diplomatic relationship game.

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Message  el_ludo le Jeu 2 Mar 2017 - 13:36

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Message  el_ludo le Mer 5 Avr 2017 - 13:49

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Chronology

Mythic age of creation

Elle builds Mornea, then, after the three first Architects, Orhöm, wants to know and follow the wind. Orhöm the silvery brings to Mornea the nocturnal rest and the pale light of Hannah.
After his curse, Orhöm leaves the others architects to travel Mornea, creates men and orders them to go where the winds carry them.

Age of Peace
Come to the East to find the place where Thebus has gone. Few families settle on a desert Archipelago of the Dreams Ocean.
Concorde Age
Cycle 1097 _ Kastel Kanam burns and 843 residents of the west barony are exiled overseas
Cycle 1100 _Lead by Irma the Templar, 487 survivors sail into the West.
Cycle 1129 _ Irma vanishes
Cycle 1268 _ The storm force the Utopians flee the Archipelago
Cycle 1269 _ Arrival on the great island
Cycle 1294 _ Building of the first flotilla
Cycle 1302 _ Discovery of the well and exploration of the first caves
Cycle 1353 _ Forteza explosion
Cycle 1350 – 1365 _ Increase trading on Mornea Coast
Cycle 1367-1368 _ Preparation for the Return, intense ship construction
Cycle 1369 _ Return Expedition, permanent settlement on Nacer Engolimo
Cycle 1370 _ Naashti arrive in Forteza
Cycle 1372 _ Sheikhs learn of UTOPIA existence and reveal this information to all of Mornea


Presentation
UTOPIA is more a concept of society than a real geographical space. If we ask them where they live, the UTOPIANS will give the vessel name, if we insist a little more, they will speak of their Balsao. Nevertheless, if they must define the space where they live, who they serve; the UTOPIANS indicate the Dreams Ocean, and they live by and for the sea.
They draw their maritime maps of the Ocean with the Mornea continent being the lower end and the Oceanic gap at the upper edge. The great South-North current, which travels the ocean, is always at the center.

Thus are defined the three mains directions of the UTOPIAN map, the Molhe where the current originates south of the Empire of the Jade triad, the Arrepio where it proceeds to the North and the Nascer opposite of the gap (the east).

However, today the Sheikhs discover the Utopians existence and reveal them to Mornea's Leaders. The Utopians are now a force in the diplomatic relationship game.

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