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Re: English scenario book

Message  Vegabond le Mer 2 Nov 2016 - 20:20

This is late, but all David's changes look good.

This was an 8. I had to move the ) so the smily face wouldn't show up.

Special rules
The crowd : all miniatures are considered to have the Stealthy skill (No, juste a covert)
The crowd: for the duration of the game, all miniatures are considered to be under cover. Miniatures that have the Stealthy skill printed on their card, succeed on their roll as if they were a size smaller. So a size 2 miniature with Stealthy succeeds on its cover roll on a 6 or more (instead of 8 ). Size 1 miniatures with Stealthy succeed on a 4 or more (instead of 6).

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Re: English scenario book

Message  nicoleblond le Mer 2 Nov 2016 - 22:23

OK, it was corrected Very Happy

Some corrections from El-ludo...

Page 2
2nd § - 3th sentence
actually a écrit:Father. What else should she call him? Her father, he was not. Yet there was something. She never found a better name and he accepted it graciously. As she neared the entrance, her mind took her once again traveling in her own past.
suggestion a écrit:Father. What else should she call him? Her father, he was not. Yet he was something. She never found a better name and he accepted it graciously. As she neared the entrance, her mind took her once again traveling in her own past.

3th § - 3th sentence - add a comma after alley
actually a écrit:At the corner of an alley she hides behind some crates to devour the product of her theft.
suggestion a écrit:At the corner of an alley, she hides behind some crates to devour the product of her theft.

9th §
actually a écrit:“ Your heart seems hard for a child your age. What could we do to soften it? ”
suggestion a écrit:“ Your heart seems hard for a child of your age. What could we do to soften it? ”

12th § - last sentence
actually a écrit:Many others had not had the opportunity to live more than a few hours.
actually a écrit:Many others fifth had not had the opportunity to live more than a few hours.

2nd column - 1st &
actually a écrit:Brutal return to the present. She takes control of her psyche. What good is it to rekindle those memories here? She forces herself to silently enter the tent. The interior is comfortable and richly decorated but without ostentation.
suggestion a écrit:Brutal return to the present. She takes control of her psyche. What good is it to rekindle those memories here? To shup up her memories, she forces herself to pass the entrance of the tent. The interior is comfortable and richly decorated but without ostentation.

2nd colum - 9th § - add a comma after "and this"
actually a écrit:What a dirty trick! While he is intoxicated on the vapors of his hookah, he attacks her small personal pleasures! And this in the sweetest tone ever.
suggestion a écrit:What a dirty trick! While he is intoxicated on the vapors of his hookah, he attacks her small personal pleasures! And this, in the sweetest tone ever.

2nd colum - last §
actually a écrit:“ The tribe of the Sun-carry-sugar does not grow tobacco, as you well know. Nevertheless, the merchants of the Triad were around. I took the opportunity to purchase what you use in your hookah. Does that not please you? ”
suggestion a écrit:“ The tribe of the Sun-carry-sugar does not grow tobacco, as you well know. Nevertheless, the merchants of the Triad were around. I took the opportunity to purchase what you use in your hookah. Does that not please you father? ”

right column - 5th §
actually a écrit:An affirmation, more questions, end of the game. Kabircheikh Hakim Ibn Khalid gets up slowly and his mocking gaze becomes softer.
suggestion a écrit:An affirmation, no more questions, end of the game. Kabircheikh Hakim Ibn Khalid gets up slowly and his mocking gaze becomes softer.

right colum - 6th §
actually a écrit:This causes them both to share a laugh in his tent. She, the little street thief, the cursed child of a litter of five and he, the great Kabircheikh, respected by all for his wisdom and knowledge. For a brief moment, they are a family, sharing a laugh, ­naive and free.

suggestion a écrit:This causes them both to share a laugh in his tent. She, the little street thief, the cursed child of a litter of five and him, the great Kabircheikh, respected by all for his wisdom and knowledge. For a brief moment, they are a family, sharing a laugh, ­naive and free.




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actually a écrit:Link to download a profile card: www.alkemy-the-game.com/en/elements-graphics-cards/
actually a écrit:Link to download graphic element of profile card: www.alkemy-the-game.com/en/elements-graphics-cards/



Page 10 - Purpose of scenario
actually a écrit:The emissary carries 4 documents. It must give one to another miniature, put one into a chest, discard one and keep one.
suggestion a écrit:The emissary carries 4 documents. It must give one to your character, put one into a chest, discard one and keep one.



Page 11
Water document : 2nd sentence
actually a écrit:The Water document must be passed to a character from your company in contact with the emissary at the end of an action. For an enemy miniature to steal the document, it must succeed in an opposed REF test (difficulty 10 if against the emissary).
suggestion a écrit:The Water document must be passed to a character from your company in contact with the emissary at the end of an action. For an enemy miniature or the emissary to steal the document, it must succeed in an opposed REF test (difficulty 10 if against the emissary).

Earth document: 2nd sentence
actually a écrit:The Earth document must be deposited in a chest. Only the emissary may transfer the document to the chest at the end of an action. To steal the Earth document from the emissary or the opposing chest, a DEF test with a difficulty of 18 must be made.
suggestion a écrit:The Earth document must be deposited in a chest. Only the emissary may transfer the document to the chest at the end of an action. To steal the Earth document from the emissary or an enemy miniatures or the opposing chest, a DEF test with a difficulty of 18 must be made.



Page 12, 1st colum, 6th §
actually a écrit:She leaves the merchant at the entrance of Kastel Kumaraid, leaving him to his dreams of farms and flying squirrels. Outside the city extends the enclosure of a monastery, the only lodging place for travelers. Assia plans to leave Orph lying around her ears. “No city peddles as many secrets as this one,” she whispers.
suggestion a écrit:She leaves the merchant at the entrance of Kastel Kumaraid, leaving him to his dreams of farms and flying squirrels. Outside the city extends the enclosure of a monastery, the only lodging place for travelers. Assia plans to let trainer around her ears. “No city peddles as many secrets as this one,” she whispers.

2nd colum, 3th §
actually a écrit:Assia answers him with a quick smile and browses the shelves. She looks for the volumes of cycle 1369. There are many, which reassures her this cycle had many experiences to relate. She notes that there is a volume missing. Is it the book the triadic emissary reads?
suggestion a écrit:Assia answers him with a quick smile and browses the shelves. She looks for the volumes of cycle 1369. There are many, which reassures her this cycle had many experiences to relate. She notes that there is all the volume. So what book could be read the triadic emissary ?



Page 14 - 2nd §
actually a écrit:There were five, mostly Ermadhi. Was she one of these runaway sisters who had taken refuge in the White caliphate? In that case, what was she doing here?
suggestion a écrit:There were five to accompany her, mostly Ermadhi. Was she one of these runaway sisters who had taken refuge in the White caliphate? In that case, what was she doing here?

Page 14 - Right column
actually a écrit:While the Ermadhi flee with the Sorhna, Assia is able to convince the faithful’s guards to question the Orientals. Given their natural distrust, this does not pose any difficulty to the tricky Khaliman.
suggestion a écrit:While the Ermadhi was load to stop the other emissary, Assia is able to convince the faithful’s guards to question the Orientals. Given their natural distrust, this does not pose any difficulty to the tricky Khaliman.



Page 25 - player overview. He doesn't understand "the better miniatures the better" - there is no verb, is this normal?
actually a écrit:This is a very interesting scenario because unlike many others, it does not favor miniatures with many AP. To control spores and score points, the more miniatures the better. It will thus eliminate more enemy miniatures.
suggestion a écrit:This is a very interesting scenario because unlike many others, it does not favor miniatures with many AP. To control spores and score points, the more miniatures is the better. It will thus eliminate more enemy miniatures.



Page 34, it miss "in the heart"
actually a écrit:Obviously, these lights inflame envy, and, not to be outdone, the caliphs or leaders of other city-ports of the Canal would like to install such systems in their cities, to show that their city is just as beautiful...
suggestion a écrit:Obviously, these lights inflame envy, and, not to be outdone, the caliphs or leaders of other city-ports of the Canal would like to install such systems in the heart of their cities, to show that their city is just as beautiful...

There is no mention of the different colors created by various alchemists stones
actually a écrit:Thus we see more and more alchemists arriving from city-port neighbors, to study this complex plumbing system powered by alchemical stones, which can be bought very easily at Crepuscule and is unique in Mornea.
suggestion a écrit:Thus we see more and more alchemists arriving from city-port neighbors, to study this complex plumbing system powered by alchemical stones to the color navy, flint, swarm or burning, which can be bought very easily at Crepuscule and is unique in Mornea.

Gather stone special rules - it is not indicated which can collect more stones per round
actually a écrit:Gather stones: the land is filled with alchemical stones. A miniature may pick up an alchemical stone (any item) for 1 AP. The player secretly notes on the back of the miniature’s reference card that picked up the stone (W for Water, E for Earth, F for Fire and A for Air). When spending the stone, show the back of the card with the letter. At any time, indicate to your opponent the number of stones that a miniature has if he so requests.
suggestion a écrit:Gather stones: the land is filled with alchemical stones. A miniature may pick up an alchemical stone (any item) for 1 AP by stone. The player secretly notes on the back of the miniature’s reference card that picked up the stone (W for Water, E for Earth, F for Fire and A for Air). When spending the stone, show the back of the card with the letter. At any time, indicate to your opponent the number of stones that a miniature has if he so requests.
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Re: English scenario book

Message  mallachain le Jeu 3 Nov 2016 - 1:41

Below are the changes I have issues with:

nicoleblond a écrit:
Page 2
2nd § - 3th sentence
actually a écrit:Father. What else should she call him? Her father, he was not. Yet there was something. She never found a better name and he accepted it graciously. As she neared the entrance, her mind took her once again traveling in her own past.
suggestion a écrit:Father. What else should she call him? Her father, he was not. Yet he was something. She never found a better name and he accepted it graciously. As she neared the entrance, her mind took her once again traveling in her own past.
Either way works. I prefer there.

nicoleblond a écrit:9th §
actually a écrit:“ Your heart seems hard for a child your age. What could we do to soften it? ”
suggestion a écrit:“ Your heart seems hard for a child of your age. What could we do to soften it? ”
My two cents: "of" is implied and is not needed.

nicoleblond a écrit:12th § - last sentence
actually a écrit:Many others had not had the opportunity to live more than a few hours.
actually a écrit:Many others fifth had not had the opportunity to live more than a few hours.
I have no idea what "fifth" is supposed to mean, but it doesn't work here.

nicoleblond a écrit:2nd column - 1st &
actually a écrit:Brutal return to the present. She takes control of her psyche. What good is it to rekindle those memories here? She forces herself to silently enter the tent. The interior is comfortable and richly decorated but without ostentation.
suggestion a écrit:Brutal return to the present. She takes control of her psyche. What good is it to rekindle those memories here? To shup up her memories, she forces herself to pass the entrance of the tent. The interior is comfortable and richly decorated but without ostentation.
The 1st version works better. "Shup" isn't used in that way, and "pass the entrance of the tent" means she walked by the tent and didn't enter it - which the next sentence contradicts.

nicoleblond a écrit:
2nd colum - last §
actually a écrit:“ The tribe of the Sun-carry-sugar does not grow tobacco, as you well know. Nevertheless, the merchants of the Triad were around. I took the opportunity to purchase what you use in your hookah. Does that not please you? ”
suggestion a écrit:“ The tribe of the Sun-carry-sugar does not grow tobacco, as you well know. Nevertheless, the merchants of the Triad were around. I took the opportunity to purchase what you use in your hookah. Does that not please you father? ”
Should be: Does that not please you, father?

nicoleblond a écrit:right colum - 6th §
actually a écrit:This causes them both to share a laugh in his tent. She, the little street thief, the cursed child of a litter of five and he, the great Kabircheikh, respected by all for his wisdom and knowledge. For a brief moment, they are a family, sharing a laugh, ­naive and free.
suggestion a écrit:This causes them both to share a laugh in his tent. She, the little street thief, the cursed child of a litter of five and him, the great Kabircheikh, respected by all for his wisdom and knowledge. For a brief moment, they are a family, sharing a laugh, ­naive and free.
Using "him" in this context is not correct in English.

nicoleblond a écrit:Page 5
actually a écrit:Link to download a profile card: www.alkemy-the-game.com/en/elements-graphics-cards/
actually a écrit:Link to download graphic element of profile card: www.alkemy-the-game.com/en/elements-graphics-cards/
Should be: Link to download graphic elements of profile cards:


nicoleblond a écrit:Page 11
Earth document: 2nd sentence
actually a écrit:The Earth document must be deposited in a chest. Only the emissary may transfer the document to the chest at the end of an action. To steal the Earth document from the emissary or the opposing chest, a DEF test with a difficulty of 18 must be made.
suggestion a écrit:The Earth document must be deposited in a chest. Only the emissary may transfer the document to the chest at the end of an action. To steal the Earth document from the emissary or an enemy miniatures or the opposing chest, a DEF test with a difficulty of 18 must be made.
Should be: To steal the Earth document from the emissary, an enemy miniature, or the opposing...


nicoleblond a écrit:
Page 12, 1st colum, 6th §
actually a écrit:She leaves the merchant at the entrance of Kastel Kumaraid, leaving him to his dreams of farms and flying squirrels. Outside the city extends the enclosure of a monastery, the only lodging place for travelers. Assia plans to leave Orph lying around her ears. “No city peddles as many secrets as this one,” she whispers.
suggestion a écrit:She leaves the merchant at the entrance of Kastel Kumaraid, leaving him to his dreams of farms and flying squirrels. Outside the city extends the enclosure of a monastery, the only lodging place for travelers. Assia plans to let trainer around her ears. “No city peddles as many secrets as this one,” she whispers.
I have no idea what "let trainer" means in this sentence. What are we trying to say?

nicoleblond a écrit:2nd colum, 3th §
actually a écrit:Assia answers him with a quick smile and browses the shelves. She looks for the volumes of cycle 1369. There are many, which reassures her this cycle had many experiences to relate. She notes that there is a volume missing. Is it the book the triadic emissary reads?
suggestion a écrit:Assia answers him with a quick smile and browses the shelves. She looks for the volumes of cycle 1369. There are many, which reassures her this cycle had many experiences to relate. She notes that there is all the volume. So what book could be read the triadic emissary ?
The suggestion completely changes what is happening. It all depends on whether there is a volume missing from the section she is looking at.
If there is a volume missing, the first version works. If not, then it should be: She notes that all the volumes are present. So what book is the triadic emissary reading?


nicoleblond a écrit:
Page 14 - Right column
actually a écrit:While the Ermadhi flee with the Sorhna, Assia is able to convince the faithful’s guards to question the Orientals. Given their natural distrust, this does not pose any difficulty to the tricky Khaliman.
suggestion a écrit:While the Ermadhi was load to stop the other emissary, Assia is able to convince the faithful’s guards to question the Orientals. Given their natural distrust, this does not pose any difficulty to the tricky Khaliman.
Should be: While the Ermadhi is loath to stop the other emissary, ...

nicoleblond a écrit:
Page 25 - player overview. He doesn't understand "the better miniatures the better" - there is no verb, is this normal?
actually a écrit:This is a very interesting scenario because unlike many others, it does not favor miniatures with many AP. To control spores and score points, the more miniatures the better. It will thus eliminate more enemy miniatures.
suggestion a écrit:This is a very interesting scenario because unlike many others, it does not favor miniatures with many AP. To control spores and score points, the more miniatures is the better. It will thus eliminate more enemy miniatures.
The first version works. If you want to change it, it should be: To control spores and score points, more miniatures is better.

nicoleblond a écrit:
There is no mention of the different colors created by various alchemists stones
actually a écrit:Thus we see more and more alchemists arriving from city-port neighbors, to study this complex plumbing system powered by alchemical stones, which can be bought very easily at Crepuscule and is unique in Mornea.
suggestion a écrit:Thus we see more and more alchemists arriving from city-port neighbors, to study this complex plumbing system powered by alchemical stones to the color navy, flint, swarm or burning, which can be bought very easily at Crepuscule and is unique in Mornea.
Change it to: Thus we see more and more alchemists arriving from city-port neighbors, to study this complex plumbing system powered by alchemical stones. Many colors are created by the stones (white, flint, navy and red), which can be bought very easily at Crepuscule and is unique in Mornea.
I have no idea what colors "swarm or burning" are supposed to be, so I changed them a bit.  Smile

nicoleblond a écrit:
Gather stone special rules - it is not indicated which can collect more stones per round
actually a écrit:Gather stones: the land is filled with alchemical stones. A miniature may pick up an alchemical stone (any item) for 1 AP. The player secretly notes on the back of the miniature’s reference card that picked up the stone (W for Water, E for Earth, F for Fire and A for Air). When spending the stone, show the back of the card with the letter. At any time, indicate to your opponent the number of stones that a miniature has if he so requests.
suggestion a écrit:Gather stones: the land is filled with alchemical stones. A miniature may pick up an alchemical stone (any item) for 1 AP by stone. The player secretly notes on the back of the miniature’s reference card that picked up the stone (W for Water, E for Earth, F for Fire and A for Air). When spending the stone, show the back of the card with the letter. At any time, indicate to your opponent the number of stones that a miniature has if he so requests.
Should be: A miniature may pick up an alchemical stone (any item) for 1 AP per stone.

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Re: English scenario book

Message  el_ludo le Jeu 3 Nov 2016 - 8:07


nicoleblond a écrit:12th § - last sentence
actually a écrit:Many others had not had the opportunity to live more than a few hours.
actually a écrit:Many others fifth had not had the opportunity to live more than a few hours.
I have no idea what "fifth" is supposed to mean, but it doesn't work here.

In Khaliman Republic History, when a litter of five born, it's not a good sign, so the fifth is killed. assia is a fifth, and she was lucky to survive

nicoleblond a écrit:
Page 12, 1st colum, 6th §
actually a écrit:She leaves the merchant at the entrance of Kastel Kumaraid, leaving him to his dreams of farms and flying squirrels. Outside the city extends the enclosure of a monastery, the only lodging place for travelers. Assia plans to leave Orph lying around her ears. “No city peddles as many secrets as this one,” she whispers.
suggestion a écrit:She leaves the merchant at the entrance of Kastel Kumaraid, leaving him to his dreams of farms and flying squirrels. Outside the city extends the enclosure of a monastery, the only lodging place for travelers. Assia plans to let trainer around her ears. “No city peddles as many secrets as this one,” she whispers.
I have no idea what "let trainer" means in this sentence. What are we trying to say?

we are trying to say, assia want listen all the rumours of the city, during her times in the city


nicoleblond a écrit:2nd colum, 3th §
actually a écrit:Assia answers him with a quick smile and browses the shelves. She looks for the volumes of cycle 1369. There are many, which reassures her this cycle had many experiences to relate. She notes that there is a volume missing. Is it the book the triadic emissary reads?
suggestion a écrit:Assia answers him with a quick smile and browses the shelves. She looks for the volumes of cycle 1369. There are many, which reassures her this cycle had many experiences to relate. She notes that there is all the volume. So what book could be read the triadic emissary ?
The suggestion completely changes what is happening. It all depends on whether there is a volume missing from the section she is looking at.
If there is a volume missing, the first version works. If not, then it should be: She notes that all the volumes are present. So what book is the triadic emissary reading?

For me, she search to read the book of the cycle 1369, and she notices no one is missing, so she ask to herself what book can read the triadic ?







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Re: English scenario book

Message  nicoleblond le Jeu 3 Nov 2016 - 23:37

Page 5
Hero don't need to survive after battle to increase his capacity.
actually a écrit:Changing your hero
After surviving 10 skirmishes, you have the option to upgrade your hero. You increase his recruitment cost by 5 points and you have 10 additional evolution points to distribute.
sugggestion a écrit:Changing your hero
After surviving 10 skirmishes, you have the option to upgrade your hero. You increase his recruitment cost by 5 points and you have 10 additional evolution points to distribute.

actually a écrit:After surviving another 10 battles, you may upgrade your hero again. You increase the recruitment cost by another 5 points, you gain 1 AP and 1 point to put into one of your hero’s characteristics.
suggestion a écrit:After surviving another 10 battles, you may upgrade your hero again. You increase the recruitment cost by another 5 points, you gain 1 AP and 1 point to put into one of your hero’s characteristics.
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Re: English scenario book

Message  mallachain le Ven 4 Nov 2016 - 0:28

el_ludo a écrit:
nicoleblond a écrit:12th § - last sentence
actually a écrit:Many others had not had the opportunity to live more than a few hours.
actually a écrit:Many others fifth had not had the opportunity to live more than a few hours.
I have no idea what "fifth" is supposed to mean, but it doesn't work here.

In Khaliman Republic History, when a litter of five born, it's not a good sign, so the fifth is killed. assia is a fifth, and she was lucky to survive
Got it. How about this: Unlike most fifth-born from a litter, which are not allowed the opportunity to live more than a few hours, she was lucky to survive.

el_ludo a écrit:
nicoleblond a écrit:
Page 12, 1st colum, 6th §
actually a écrit:She leaves the merchant at the entrance of Kastel Kumaraid, leaving him to his dreams of farms and flying squirrels. Outside the city extends the enclosure of a monastery, the only lodging place for travelers. Assia plans to leave Orph lying around her ears. “No city peddles as many secrets as this one,” she whispers.
suggestion a écrit:She leaves the merchant at the entrance of Kastel Kumaraid, leaving him to his dreams of farms and flying squirrels. Outside the city extends the enclosure of a monastery, the only lodging place for travelers. Assia plans to let trainer around her ears. “No city peddles as many secrets as this one,” she whispers.
I have no idea what "let trainer" means in this sentence. What are we trying to say?

we are trying to say, assia want listen all the rumours of the city, during her times in the city
Now I understand. How about: Assia keeps her ears open.

el_ludo a écrit:
nicoleblond a écrit:2nd colum, 3th §
actually a écrit:Assia answers him with a quick smile and browses the shelves. She looks for the volumes of cycle 1369. There are many, which reassures her this cycle had many experiences to relate. She notes that there is a volume missing. Is it the book the triadic emissary reads?
suggestion a écrit:Assia answers him with a quick smile and browses the shelves. She looks for the volumes of cycle 1369. There are many, which reassures her this cycle had many experiences to relate. She notes that there is all the volume. So what book could be read the triadic emissary ?
The suggestion completely changes what is happening. It all depends on whether there is a volume missing from the section she is looking at.
If there is a volume missing, the first version works. If not, then it should be: She notes that all the volumes are present. So what book is the triadic emissary reading?

For me, she search to read the book of the cycle 1369, and she notices no one is missing, so she ask to herself what book can read the triadic ?
That's this one: She notes that all the volumes are present. So what book is the triadic emissary reading?

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Re: English scenario book

Message  el_ludo le Ven 4 Nov 2016 - 12:22

Mallachain, i'm agree with yours sentences

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Re: English scenario book

Message  nicoleblond le Ven 4 Nov 2016 - 13:15

OK, I've made all corrections. I try to make PDF tonight and send you for a last review.
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Re: English scenario book

Message  Vegabond le Jeu 10 Nov 2016 - 20:20

page 3, in chart
*155 points for a medium game

Also under Victory conditions
Change #3 to
3) The maximum amount of VP possible.


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Re: English scenario book

Message  Vegabond le Jeu 10 Nov 2016 - 21:41

page 3, 2nd column, 2nd bullet (-) under Scenery elements and alchemical components

, and not in opposing areas of deployment.

Does this mean you can't put scenery elements in your opponents deployment area?

If so, then change it to

", and not in your opponents deployment area."

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Re: English scenario book

Message  Vegabond le Jeu 10 Nov 2016 - 22:01

Question

page 7, Emissary:
So the Emissary can find a chest, but the player doesn't score points. Does that mean a second model has to probe the same area to "recover" the chest and get the points?

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Message  Vegabond le Jeu 10 Nov 2016 - 22:57

page 9, Victory conditions
#2
change "if a player has 11 VP or more, it wins."
to ""if a player has 11 VP or more, he wins."

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Re: English scenario book

Message  Vegabond le Jeu 10 Nov 2016 - 23:49

page 11, 1st column, 2nd paragraph, 2nd sentence

change "steal the document must pass of COM test"
to "steal the document must pass a COM test"

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Message  Vegabond le Jeu 10 Nov 2016 - 23:58

page 13, Victory conditions
2) add the bit about a tie. If two players having 7VP...

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Message  Vegabond le Ven 11 Nov 2016 - 0:42

page 17
Emissary:
first (-) bullet point
"the emissary uses the white dice,"

Questions
1) Does it cost an AP to attempt the MIN test?
2) If you fail the test with your last AP, can you spend 1AP the next round to automatically pass or do you have to attempt the MIN test again?

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Message  Vegabond le Ven 11 Nov 2016 - 1:04

page 20
Objective tokens
2nd sentence

"Place a jin post on"

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Message  Vegabond le Ven 11 Nov 2016 - 1:06

page 21
Pick a Lock:
1st sentence

"1 inch or less from a chest may spend"


Trap:
2nd sentence

"All miniatures within 1 inch or less of the chest suffer 1 DAM for each mace symbol rolled."

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Message  Vegabond le Ven 11 Nov 2016 - 1:26

page 22
purpose of scenario

"Divide the board into 9 different"

Special rules
2nd sentence

"An on watch mounted miniature that is reactivated

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Message  Vegabond le Ven 11 Nov 2016 - 1:50

page 27

In the file named scenario book uk page,

half of page 27 is missing and the top of column 2 needs editing.
the middle section of page 29 is missing.

The file named scenario book uk planche seems to be ok.

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Message  Vegabond le Ven 11 Nov 2016 - 2:02

page 28
for 3 players, last sentence

change (it will be player in table 1 below)
to (it will be player 1 in the table below)

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Message  nicoleblond le Ven 11 Nov 2016 - 12:34

OK, I made all corrections.

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page 7, Emissary:
So the Emissary can find a chest, but the player doesn't score points. Does that mean a second model has to probe the same area to "recover" the chest and get the points?
Yes, that's it.

Vegabond a écrit:page 13, Victory conditions
2) add the bit about a tie. If two players having 7VP...
It's not possible two players having 7 VP, because only one player can take last token (chapel)


Vegabond a écrit:page 17
Emissary:
first (-) bullet point
"the emissary uses the white dice,"

Questions
1) Does it cost an AP to attempt the MIN test?
2) If you fail the test with your last AP, can you spend 1AP the next round to automatically pass or do you have to attempt the MIN test again?
1) No, but when test is failed, you can spend 1 AP to pass the test.
2) When you spend 1 AP, the test is successful.

Vegabond a écrit:page 22
Special rules
2nd sentence
"An on watch mounted miniature that is reactivated
Old:
If a miniature is astride several neighborhoods, the player must indicate at the end of its activation in which neighborhood he chooses to be. A mounted miniature on watch on horseback that is reactivated during the round can choose to change neighborhoods.

New:
If a miniature is astride several neighborhoods, the player must indicate at the end of its activation in which neighborhood he chooses to be. An on watch mounted miniature that is reactivated during the round can choose to change neighborhoods.

Right?


vegabond a écrit:page 27

In the file named scenario book uk page,

half of page 27 is missing and the top of column 2 needs editing.
the middle section of page 29 is missing.

The file named scenario book uk planche seems to be ok.
Strange... I think there is a problem with pdf file generated.
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Re: English scenario book

Message  Vegabond le Lun 14 Nov 2016 - 17:31

nicoleblond a écrit:
Vegabond a écrit:page 22
Special rules
2nd sentence
"An on watch mounted miniature that is reactivated
Old:
If a miniature is astride several neighborhoods, the player must indicate at the end of its activation in which neighborhood he chooses to be. A mounted miniature on watch on horseback that is reactivated during the round can choose to change neighborhoods.

New:
If a miniature is astride several neighborhoods, the player must indicate at the end of its activation in which neighborhood he chooses to be. An on watch mounted miniature that is reactivated during the round can choose to change neighborhoods.

Right?

Correct.

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Re: English scenario book

Message  nicoleblond le Mar 15 Nov 2016 - 21:35

I made proofreading. I uniformize uppercase and lowercase in subtitle (Victory conditions, Alchemical components, Scenery elements, ...)

Page 16 - deployment area
See diagram for Utopia battlement. For a standard battlemat make two deployments zones, ...

Battlement is right?

We've used "Utopia Battlemat" (caption page 17 under picture utopia battlemat).
Battlemat ? Battlement?




Page 22 / 23
I've change Middle line in Center line in two diagrams. We use "center line" in others diagrams.

Purpose of scenario
Divide the board into 9 different neighborhoods rated from A to I. These neighborhoods are 8x8 inches each and are placed on either side of the median line (neighborhoods D, E and F are placed straddling the center line). You score victory points by controlling neighborhoods.

Do we change by "center line" instead "median line"?
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Re: English scenario book

Message  Vegabond le Mar 15 Nov 2016 - 23:25

nicoleblond a écrit:I made proofreading. I uniformize uppercase and lowercase in subtitle (Victory conditions, Alchemical components, Scenery elements, ...)

Page 16 - deployment area
See diagram for Utopia battlement. For a standard battlemat make two deployments zones, ...

Battlement is right?

We've used "Utopia Battlemat" (caption page 17 under picture utopia battlemat).
Battlemat ? Battlement?




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I've change Middle line in Center line in two diagrams. We use "center line" in others diagrams.

Purpose of scenario
Divide the board into 9 different neighborhoods rated from A to I. These neighborhoods are 8x8 inches each and are placed on either side of the median line (neighborhoods D, E and F are placed straddling the center line). You score victory points by controlling neighborhoods.

Do we change by "center line" instead "median line"?

battlemat is correct.

median line is fine.

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Re: English scenario book

Message  Vegabond le Mer 16 Nov 2016 - 0:55

Tiding up some wording.

Page 11
Left column, 3rd paragraph, 1st sentence
Change ", each model can attempt to steal"
to ", each miniature can attempt to steal"

page 25
player overview, 3rd column
Change "each spore in your camp and get a model to blow"
to "each spore in your camp and get a miniature to blow"

page 30
Carry a Treasure
Change all instances of model in the (-) bullets to miniature

page 31
Left column, 1st paragraph
1st (-) Change "-In combat, a model carrying"
to "-In combat, a miniature carrying"

2nd (-) Change "Finally, a figurine wishing to act against a model carrying"
to "Finally, a miniature wishing to act against a miniature carrying"

Drop a treasure:
1st sentence,
Change "A model can drop its treasure"
to "A miniature can drop its treasure"

2nd sentence,
Change "If the model carrying a treasure is killed, the treasure is placed at the spot where the miniature was."
to "If the miniature carrying a treasure is killed, the treasure is placed where the miniature was."


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