Naashti Summary

It's not really easy to translate my meanings...
Hope you'll understand and can correct^^

background #1 a écrit:Existence for a Naashti is only a slow transformation to reach a perfect state. Their life is organized for that. Sublimation of a Naashti into two Pes~Hat and their successive moltings in Rey~Mez and Der~Ash to the state of Ug~Sod which, at time, will sublimate into two new Pes~Hat, the cycle of life is perpetual.
Their life is orderly, functional and forward knowledge acquisition and skills. Young Pes~Hat receive a portion of prior Ug~Sod who gave their live, and make new experiences. Thus, each of their states progressing from previous.
The disappearance of almost all of their people during the Alchemical War was a terrible shock for Naashtis. They saw then remove an amount of lives and irreplaceable experiences and found themselves facing annihilation

Since then, Naashtis are obsessed with the preservation of life. Lightning-Water gave them the opportunity to animate mineral creatures and alchemy offered the Tison which preserves their consciousness. Now the Naashtis disappear no more. On the death of the body, their Tison is transferred to a techno-mineral body and continue to live as an Ouroboros.
Unfortunately, this is only a partial solution. The ouroboros is frozen in form and changes no longer. It will no longer evolve or sublimate in twoPes~Hat.
Some of Naashtis are convinced that a solution exists. Others think the easiest way is to get rid of the problem: Humans.

Here's my changes:

Existence for the Naashti is a slow transformation to reach a perfect state. Sublimation of a Naashti into two Pes~Hat and their successive moltings in Rey~Mez and Der~Ash to the state of Ug~Sod which, in time, will sublimate into two new Pes~Hat, the cycle of life is perpetual.
Their life is orderly, functional and focuses on knowledge acquisition and skills. Young Pes~Hat receive a portion of their progenitor Ug~Sod's experience, who sacrificed their life, and gain new experiences. Thus, each of their states progresses from the previous one.
The disappearance of almost all of their people during the Alchemical War was a terrible shock for Naashtis. They lost a large amount of lives and irreplaceable experiences and found themselves facing annihilation.

Since then, Naashtis are obsessed with the preservation of life. Lightning-Water gave them the opportunity to animate mineral creatures and alchemy offered the Tison, which preserves their consciousness. Now the Naashtis disappear no more. On the death of the body, their Tison is transferred to a techno-mineral body and continues to live as an Ouroboros.
Unfortunately, this is only a partial solution. The ouroboros is frozen in form and can no longer change. It can no longer evolve or sublimate into two Pes~Hat.
Some of Naashtis are convinced that a solution exists. Others think the easiest way is to get rid of the problem: Humans.

Is'nt there a mistake ?

mallachain a écrit: Young Pes~Hat receive a portion of their progenitor Ug~Sod's experience, who sacrificed their life, and gain new experiences. Thus, each of their states progresses from the previous one.

During the "sublimation", the Ug~Sod disappears and gives birth to two Pes~Hat.
So can we write "who sacrificed their life" ? Is'nt it "who give them birth" ? (I shouldn't wrote "who gave their live"...)

Maybe drop the sacrificed part and change it to this:

Young Pes~Hat receive a portion of their progenitor Ug~Sod's knowledge and gain new experiences.

I'll do this
Thanks